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Re: Sergio's Promise short story
OK, so not a bad story. I got the point and the plot pretty well. The only thing that I would really say is that almost not enough imagination went ...
Aug 3, 2008 -
Re: Girls Just Wanna Have Fun
It's rare that I read a piece of work with such vivid descriptions for a characters surroundings. I loved how you compared the characters thoughts to feelings and nature! Very ...
Aug 3, 2008 -
Re: The Beginning After The End
I love the fact that you took one of you favorite plots from one of your favorite movies and continued it. I love doing the same thing every time I ...
Aug 3, 2008 -
Re: Edward
Over all a very nice job. The story seemed to have a good plot and it was obvious that the climax was clear. I agree with the fact the the ...
Aug 2, 2008 -
Re: Moonfield (Chapter 1)
Over all I thought your story is well done. My comment to you is not so much about your story, but rather the comments posted before. You mentioned that you ...
Aug 2, 2008 -
Re: That Little Fog Inside: A Man Who Has Just read a story by
Wonderfully done! I have just re-posted your poem with my own little side comments. Please don't take offence to any suggestions, they are just my thoughts. Trying to make it ...
Aug 2, 2008 -
Re: In the Moments After...
[b]Very well done. I am impressed with the way you showed how much the relationship between Ron and Hermione had changed. The only suggestion that I would make would be ...
Aug 2, 2008
